Entry #4
Hammers and anvil stand ready, but empty silence drones
A man enters silence making it cadence, rhythm and tone
The fires are lit and lick hot spit into a single melting shard
Muscled master and musical strikes shape the twisted bar
The work gives him worth as day bleeds away arterial, dead
The crescendo increases with the tempo unceasing, metal red
Sweat gathers quick, muscles hammer and twitch eternal
The conceit of a master makes perfection a metallic mural
The silence creeps back as the strikes slowly cease their attack
He looks at the piece, the perfection and memories come back
He glares at the piece hung in a sheath in the shed of his youth
The thought comes in as painfully as sin and blossoms truth
His arms are strong, just two flexible tongs, but his two eyes
Are better far as flaws reveal the near invisible cracks as lies
A shrieking rage of unfolded pain that rises higher and higher
His hands hold tight with rage a light as rod is inspected by fire
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12/16/08
Nice! Can't wait for part two.
Thanks!
12/15/08
Part one? If you haven't gotten an artist yet, i'd be happy to help. I really liked this.
I'm glad you liked it. I'll post part two in a little bit ...
12/13/08
Wow. This is certainly a bold piece. An excellent entry indeed. If I were a flash artist or even a skilled artists I'd certainly give it a try. I think I might be able to help you out. Also could you give me feedback on my entries? If you don't mind.
What can you help me out on? Do you have any criticism? Or ... ?
Oh, and I reviewed your entry. I hope it helps :)